MysteriousPresence's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[/Evening Star\ (Nary OST)]

Hello working mate ! <3

Melodies :
The melodies are reaaally well worked ! This is amazing how you could create different complex melodies and fit them well together like at 0:39 !

Instruments :
Good instruments and mixing too ! In fact I don't really have anything to say as the instrumentalisation is perfectly chosen and the mix is awesome ! I particularly loved the beginning and the powerful 1:02 !

Personality :
Here we have the only problem of this great track : a little lack of personality ! I mean I don't think we can clearly remember this track forever : it's not unforgettable and that's the thing ! I think the melodies are too weak. They need to be more "pronounced", more powerful ! It's not a matter of complexity but of production ! You have to try building a legendary aspect on your main melody. Like making a powerful buildup and an amazing drop just before it arrives for example !

Melodies : 2/2
Instruments : 2/2
Personality : 0,5/1

Amazing work ! Your skills are really flawless : you only need to work on your structure for a better personality ! :3

AED-4 responds:

Hmm, i agree with you for the most part. There's parts where it feels a bit empty, for example at around 0:25. I could've also added some sounds that directly support the melodies, i guess. Though i still do think that the melody itself is one of the better melodies i have made.

But there's one statement that i strongly disagree with you, and that is my skills being flawless :P

Damn, now i feel bad for not having reviewed any of your songs...

[-Peaceful Nights-]

Wow, sounds like The Legend Of Zelda ! ^^

Melodies :
The melodies are perfect, I mean almost flawless ! They fit well together and are complex and creatives ! The only problem is that they are not really memorable, I think because it's not repetitive at all. I mean it can be a good thing, but if you "harass" the listener with a memorable melody, he will remember this melody and your track will have a better personality !

Instruments :
The instruments were simply awesome ! One of the best mix combination I've ever heard ! They were well used especially at 1:05 (the horns which add drama to the melodies) and from 2:29 until the end, which was simply epic !

Personality :
Well, as I said before, the track looses personality due to not-so-memorable melodies ! But it's an uncommon style which is pleasant to listen to !

Melodies : 1,5/2
Instruments : 2/2
Personality : 0,5/1

It's clearly one of the best piece I've ever reviewed : well done ! =3

Stadler responds:

I appreciate the super in-depth and honest review! Catchy melodies and a controlled amount of repetition are certainly going to be implemented in my future work.

Thank you!

[Dispnoea]

00:41, oh yes, hello Suspiria ! X)

Melodies :
Well, in fact, I have nothing to say about the melodies, they're kind of flawless ! ^^
They are really worked and memorable, especially the voice which start at 03:15 ! X)

Instruments :
The instruments are really good, in fact they are absolutely perfect ! The amazing synthesizer of the beginning, the resonating kick which start at 00:16, the... glockenspiel (?) of 00:41, the memorable voice at 03:15... But there is one thing that ruins everything, it's this bass solo at 01:37... I'm sorry to say that, but it sounds terrible ! :3

Personality :
Nice personality too, It's that kind of music that will haunt your mind forever ! X)
But again, the bass solo ruins everything ! T_T I mean it really doesn't fit with the music, and it makes for a minute this stunning song a bit ridiculous !

Melodies : 2/2
Instruments : 1,5/2
Personality : 0,5/1

That's a really great disturbing music, but I think the bass solo kind of destroyed a part of the song ! But it's just one part of the music and it proves you can do amazing tracks ! =D

Azhthar responds:

Thanks for the feedback! Actually I really like the bass solo but I should listen to it under this aspect maybe... Hmmm... Do you think it´s the sound in general? Or is it to dominant? Or just doesn´t fit the style?

[Cloudburst]

GAAAH I HATE TRANCE !!! T_T

Melody :
The melodies are like "meh" to me... I mean they are complex, worked and everything, but I don't feel like this is something new. Maybe you could try to give your melodies a more "unusual" touch !

Instruments :
Well I don't have to say anything about the instruments... I mean they fit well between each other, they are well mixed... Except WTF OMG WHAT THE HELL ARE THOSE F*****G STRINGS AND BASS AT 01:10 ? 0o
You NEEEED to compose a dramatic music with those instruments dude YOU MUST DO IT !!! ZBWAAAH !!!

Personality :
Well, you know, the personality of the music is completely destroyed by the "unoriginal" melody, it's trance after all so it's difficult to build a personality !

Melody : 1/2
Instruments : 2/2
Personality : 0/1

You must try to give your music an aspect that remains unforgettable for the listeners (especially by working on the melody), that's how your music will get an amazing personality ! BUT DUDE PLEASE MAKE A DRAMATIC MUSIC WITH THOSE STRINGS AND BAAASS !!! 0o

Zechnition responds:

Thanks for your review! And I definitely agree with you, often the "dancey" type songs are harder to get a nice personality with. Then again I was working mostly on mixing and that seems to be alright! About the dramatic song, I got one in the works right now and I might just have to add that bass! =D

[newest codes]

Wow, that's... Experimental ! :3

Melody :
I think you can do very good melodies, the first one (which starts at 00:00) is really nice, but the problem is that there is no link between all the melodies you created in this track ! 00:06 was kind of orgasmic, but I was so disappointed you chose not to follow this road and break this part (at 00:10) !

Instruments :
The first synthesizer is cool (I really like this part :3) and all those voices responding to each other at 00:06 (I do really like it) are just wonderful ! Generally, it's all really beautiful, but I think some voices sound terrible (like the one at 00:36) !

Personality :
This music is really creative, I can't deny it ! And the way you're using all those voices is... Unforgettable !

Melody : 1/2
Instruments : 1,5/2
Personality : 1/1

Great creative work, maybe you could just work on the structure of your next track, especially in order to make the melodies linked ! =)

xxxZigZagxxx responds:

Thanks for the reply, MysteriousPresence! You're right - 0:06 was pretty brilliant. But this track is about as schizophrenic as myself O_O Maybe I'll try to make a track out of that small portion. It seemed to have a nice vocal portion, as you've identified. :)

For some reason, I really like the vocal at 0:36, but it's actually eye-opening seeing that there's reason to dislike it, and I think I can see why. Thanks for acknowledging the creativity. The way I'd describe my own sound is "experimental and creative but overall, needs a LOT of polishing". The problem is, when I go to polish my tracks, they can often turn out worse than they were originally! (I am quite bad at mixing)

Thanks for the very kind words. I'll try to work on the structure of my next track, to link those melodies together. Hopefully the coherence will bring a new level of depth to my tracks.

Cheers, Mysterious! Thanks for the review.

Regards,
ZigZag

[Virginia Slimm VS Lexa Hergon - Im Evil [Mashup]]

This song is awesome ! *_*

Melody :
The melody is really nice, it fits very well with the vocals (that were created before the instrumentalisation if I'm right), congratulations to both of you because I don't think creating a melody which is pleasant to listen to and fits good with the already-existing vocals is an easy task ! From 00:34 to 00:45 was particularly orgasmic !
The lyrics are magnificent too ! They rhymes perfectly well and are really poetic ("Don't take it back, nothing's changed, always the same, rearranged, at least as bad, more deranged..." <3) ! Well done Slimm on those lyrics (if I'm not mistaking, you wrote them) !

Instruments :
No surprise, the instruments are perfectly mixed and chosen, I personally love the strings starting from 00:35 to 00:44 ! The voice is really beautiful too, I love when it becomes high like at 01:34 !

Personality : Those 8-bit-like instruments are unexpected for this kind of lyrics, which is really important to me. As well, the voice is unusual too, it creates an unique aspect for this song and makes it unforgettable !

Melody : 2/2
Instruments : 2/2
Personality : 1/1

Congratulations, this is like one of the best song I've ever heard ! Probably the best music from The Underground Collective in my opinion !

Virginia-Slimm responds:

Thank you MP!
I knew it was an unusual blend of source material for a track and was hoping we could pull it off. It's very rewarding to read that you connected with the result. I also like your concise reviewing method, super helpful!

[~Starflight~ (1 YEAR ON NEWGROUNDS)]

I'm not as amazed as the other reviewers, but that was pretty cool ! :3
Firstly the main melody is really good and inspired ! But I think there's a problem with your instruments that are really ugly ! The synthesizer that starts at 00:26 is not bad, but when the notes are getting higher, it turns terrible ! The drums are not quite enjoyable too ! Those which starts at 01:55 are way more appreciable !
So I was not really impressed until 03:38 which is really beautiful, and this until the end !
But this is just my opinion !

Evilgrapez responds:

Yeah, the synth does sound a little high pitched. I'll try to use lower notes next time. The drums were actually from the pack that FL Studio comes with. xP I'm planning on getting some new drum packs though so my drums sound much better! And about the ugly instruments, all the VSTs are actually free ones except for Messiah, the main synth. I can't afford any other VSTs yet, but someday when I get enough money I really want to get Massive.

Thanks for sharing your opinion! :)

EDIT: Also, thanks for bumping the review count to Page 2! That's the first time that's ever happened. :D

[[KillerMachine]]

We clearly see the effort you gave in this music, but the fact is when we look closer (at least from my point of view), we can't really enjoy this track... Why ? Because of the structure and the melody !
It happens that the melody is really desorganized, it sounds like you didn't have any idea while composing ! This makes a kind of poor melody, and impacts the whole song as a melody is the heart of a music !
Like the melody, the structure is desorganized too : there's the first part (00:00-00:29), then the second one (00:29-00:59), and finally the last part (00:59-01:35). Sadly, it looks like those parts don't have any link with the others...
Those two facts make the music... Kind of "soulless", which is unfortunate as you put efforts in this track !
I'm leaving three stars for those efforts, and for the progression you made from your first song ! I count on you to improve the melodies (try to build something beautiful, or epic, or catchy...) and the structure (each part must remind us that we're listening to this song and not another) of your musics !
Forgive me for this part-negative review, but well... I'm trying to help ! ;)

Enzo07 responds:

Je suis français donc tu peux écrire des critiques en français sur mes chansons :)

[Shot Infiltration]

First of all, I'm really sorry to make a so negative review, but I'd like to help you ! :/
What is the problem of this music ? Well you're saying in your description that you added "different melodies", but I listened to this track twice, and I didn't get any melody ! I mean really none !
When 01:08 came, I thought there was something awesome that would come, but no. I wouldn't be mean, but a melody is composed with some musical notes, and I couldn't get one... The problem is that the most important thing in a music is the melody, a music without any melody is kind of useless...
The other thing is that I don't get the structure, that makes me wonder why is this music existing ? Again. The only thing I can hear is drums, drums, drums again and again... And that's kind of logic, as there is no melody !
In your next work, you really got to find a melody (I think I'm rambling a little ^^'), take your keyboard, try to put different music notes together in order to make something beautiful, or epic, or catchy... Try to give your music a personality too, like... You know : an atmosphere ! Well fitting instruments, well fitting melodies...
Sorry again for the bad review, I'm leaving 1,5 stars for the effort, I hope you'll improve ! :)

BlueAlpha14 responds:

Would've been easier to put your complaints in a list so I could respond better :P
1. Ok, I may have gotten off on the wrong foot with the definition of "melody". I'll admit to that mistake.
2. 1:08 was a bit misleading and after reading this it is a disappointment. If you have any idea of what would work I could maybe edit this track or make a v2.
3. You wonder why this music exists? Umm.. I made it? lol
4. Ok, it is drum n bass so I didn't know anything about I needed a piano. Rest assured I am making a new dnb track and it might be better than this one. I can release a preview if you like.
There is not too much I can work with since I am using FL Studio Mobile until I can afford to get the PC version (despite my PC is crap).
Thank you for the review and I apologize this track is not up to your expectations. If you could check out my other stuff (not my dubstep one, I really need to remove that one...) and review those I'd appreciate it.
Any further discussion is welcome on a pm.
~Alpha

[Thiscom - Neon Hypertunnel [Trance]]

Wew, that's pretty nice !
I just love that melody and the instruments used, there's just one thing that disappointed me : that's the fact there is no variation in your melody in your whole music !
But I really liked it ! Keep improving ! :3
By the way, I love this title too ! ^^

DjThiscom responds:

You're right! When I sterted make this song I thought this will be house! But when I finished I heard it and I heard that there is no variation in melody. So I said, it will be trance! :D